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Long time no post... been a tad bit unhealthy.. but I am fine now. Just a recap... Giovanni and Leviticus tried to exit the jail and join the fight with Jetice... Sadly they both were placed in an illusion. This is where Leviticus ended up. Hopefully its decent. heh. Isn't it interesting that Divine knows a little too much...

Please read and comment... thanks..
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You know, it actually intrigues me that Leviticus is the only one you do first person in. Why not the other characters?

Anyway, a few spelling errors but otherwise a tad bland than usual. Little shorter than I'm used to, but it definately sets up the reader's mind to think about what could possibly happen to the poor bastard-

Divine: That's what I thought!

... Possom? Anywho... yeah. I'm thinking a crap load of zombies are going to pop up all over the place. I see Divine throwing a hissy fit and Levi thinking about all the lines he could to send them back to hell or whatever. xD

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Since Leviticus is more... complex than the others, I felt it would be best to do him in first person so that everyone could really hear his thoughts... Plus, it is somewhat needed since he tags along with Divine

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that makes sense. =)

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=JinShiranai May 31, 2010  Student Writer
Oh, Leviticus, always seeing God in everything. Divine did pick a curious time to show up again though. I'm surprised Leviticus didn't say anything to her about her being the reason he is in this situation to begin with.

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Sometimes arguing with that possum does nothing.. Trust me... he is really mad but knows that she can't make his situation better... So, he forgives her and moves on quickly in order to not have tension... since she is ALWAYS around.

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=JinShiranai Jun 1, 2010  Student Writer
Well if her saying so didn't prove that she's female, that right there does. :P

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Read.

What's a possum?

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lol this is a possum [link]

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Oh that's so cute! :love:

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*Leonca Jan 20, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Glad to hear you are feeling better. =)
Hmm, I wonder if Divine will want to stay with him long. Sounds like it might be kind of boring for her. I bet he wishes he could teleport now. =p

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